the poetry writing is coming slow...so i've asked my friend tani to contribute some of his beautiful works. thank you tani for your contributions! hopefully we'll have a series of these poems presented on the blog. you'll find his first poem below.
just by way of introduction: tani's poems are imagistic, and if i may say so myself--quite zen. a self-contained meditation within each poem...
peace all, and chag sameach!
-zj
Extended Moment
by guestpoet Tani
something about the
combination
train’s motion
if only these tunnels
were endless
this rumbling train could forever
elude sunrise.
6 comments:
how come no one comments on my poems? Oh well, i guess i'll be the first. I like that one, the only thing is(& this may be blogger's fault) the spacing is all normalized...there should be a bunch of blanks there & stuff, you know, not all right-justified. Yea. Thanks for putting it up!
tani i love your poem!
there. im commenting on it.
it is blogger's fault. i tried to get the blank spaces to fit in--i even tried to write my own html script to indent--and it just kept on right justifying. sorry...its still a beautiful poem.
Its really good, Tani. Has a calming effect as I imagine what you describe.
its a good thing the tunnels arent endless.. eluding sunrise can be good temporarily, when a little peace and quiet is needed to regroup... but eventually its worth coming out into the light.. even if its a little strong on the eyes at first.
very nice guestpoet tani, hope to see you more often :)
and zenjew i really like it when u bring other poets to post on your blog, nice work
thanks for the comments on my blog zj. i tried to e-mail a thanks. you really were awesome. both of you.
Tani: awesome poem. Very realistic.Something I feel every day on the train but did not express.
Hey..tani
Nice poem...
The rocking of a train has always had this effect on me so it resonated within...
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